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-RaFaEl-
22/03/2021 12:24
Bonjour, j'ai un texte en anglais que j'ai fais et j'aimerais bien que quelqu'un qui est bon en anglais me le corrige si y'a des âmes charitable je prends !
Merci d'avance!




Hello, today we decided to analyze and develop an explanation on the article by Camilla Costa, an American journalist, who analyses the evolution of the destruction of the Amazon today.
It is true that you, like me, know that the Amazon is increasingly destroyed, but we really know how much?
And yes, in January 2020 alone, more than 280 square kilometers were devastated by Man.
Today, our objective is to present you an analysis of this article but also to explain to you all the actions that man has put in place to compensate for this deforestation.
First, we will develop a section on the deforestation of the Amazon and the consequences of this disaster, then we will outline the actions that have been put in place to address this problem.

Deforestation and fires:
This article explains how the situation in Amazon is evolving today. It is true that, as Camilla Costa explained, the Amazon has been suffering real deforestation and enormous destruction for a long time.
Covid 19 today has not helped. The Amazon has suffered deforestation, which has increased by 55 percent since the outbreak of the health crisis. Indeed, as you know, Covid has led us to distance ourselves and to be confined: Brazil in particular as well as the entire territory of the Amazon in general is very affected by the health crisis especially because of the lack of resources to treat the population. The indigenous populations are suffering enormously from the crisis and cannot be treated properly. As can be seen from the diagram, the territory of the Amazon is one of the territories most affected by the crisis and this is due to their poor management in the field of health. In France, we can treat ourselves properly, care is taken, but this is not the case for Amazonians.
But that’s not all. Indeed, COVID has pushed this population, like the rest of the world, to confine itself. The guardians of the forest were forced to confine themselves and no longer work. Because of this, the forest has lost a large part of its protection, which could facilitate the work of poachers. But these people have very specific objectives and their primary motivation is economic. In fact, they mainly seek to extract minerals like gold, harvest palm oil, or harvest land to pasture to the detriment of nature. Indeed, deforestation has increased considerably which is very problematic because in addition to that, the heatwaves and drought cause huge fires that are very difficult to stop.

Since the authorities saw that this deforestation had increased, they decided to increase surveillance patrols but this is unfortunately not enough.
As quoted by Camilla Costa’s editor: "The destruction of the Amazon rainforest so far is far more important than the nearly 20% they talk about in the media.". Indeed, with the problems of corruption in the countries of the Amazon, deforestation is not stopped enough and the media minimize this drama.
To use the example of the fires, in 2019 there were huge fires that devastated a lot of the forest and there was a lot of media coverage, but the reality is that these fires happen every year. Global warming causes a lot of drought and therefore it is much harder to stop the fires because the rain is much rarer. Concerning the fire of 2019, fortunately it began to rain because otherwise the disaster would have been even more important.



One might ask: But why does the destruction of trees increase global warming?
As the scientist quoted in the article explains, a tree is a reserve of our CO2 and in exchange it releases oxygen. But when you cut down a tree, there is a release of CO2 which leads to an increase in global warming.
If today the Amazon continues to be destroyed, in 20 to 30 years there will be a considerable lengthening of the dry seasons and a general increase of temperatures in the world.

But you’re probably wondering, what’s the connection between deforestation and fires?
In fact, deforestation in addition to emitting a lot of CO2 in the air, dries the soils and therefore increases considerably the climate warming mentioned above.

Scientists today say that if we do not stop this deforestation, global warming will accelerate considerably.

Moreover this deforestation does not penalize only Men. Animals also suffer from this degradation, especially those living in this forest. Indeed, as quoted in the article, in 1 hectare of this forest we find 160 species of birds, 10 species of primates, 44 types of fish, 33 species of amphibians, 310 species of trees, 1 billion invertebrates, 22 types of reptiles, 96 types of epiphytes. And I want to remind you that the Amazon covers more than 500 million hectares. All these species are in danger and this mainly because of Man.
At the end of the article, we hear about an increase in the number of diseases. This is also a danger that threatens us all. Indeed, some studies link deforestation to an increase in mosquito-related disease: in particular leishmaniasis and malaria, which are parasitic diseases that can be very dangerous and especially very deadly. And more generally, because of this deforestation and the destruction of trees and the increase in CO2 emissions, the rise in temperatures that could be more than 8 degrees in the forest could lead to a migration of insects and animals vectors of diseases towards the cities and therefore contaminate the Man.
It is true that this article is intended to be defeatist and alarming, but today the world is gradually becoming aware of this danger and there are now politicians and associations that are taking action to combat this danger.


Conclusion:
In short, deforestation is a global problem and challenge with many impacts, whether economic, social, environmental or even vital. In spite of many actions and awareness, there are still great efforts to be made by every Man on earth.
Finally, we wanted to explain why we decided to present this topic. Indeed, today, global warming is impacting us all and this in large part because of deforestation and we wanted to explain this to you because this topic is particularly important to us.
Thank you for listening.
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27/03/2021 19:42
Hello, I put ketchup in my hot-dog !
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29/03/2021 00:45
Hello! Je suis anglophone, du coup si tu es sérieux tu peux m’écrire directement ça serait plus simple de comprendre ce que tu recherches et tout :)
(Et plus simple pour moi de te répondre et écrire ce qui serait approprié)
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29/03/2021 00:53

Conclusion:
In short, deforestation is a global problem and challenge with many impacts, whether economic, social, environmental or even vital. In spite of many actions and awareness, there are still great efforts to be made by every Man on earth.
Finally, we wanted to explain why we decided to present this topic. Indeed, today, global warming is impacting us all and this in large part because of deforestation and we wanted to explain this to you because this topic is particularly important to us.
Thank you for listening.


In conclusion* je sais pas le format de ton texte, mais habituellement ça irais un peu comme ceci: « In conclusion, deforestation (...) »
Pour pas te répéter avec in short et conclusion puisque tu viennes de le mentionner. Et « in short » ca fait pas assez professionnel, c’est comme dire « en gros, notre sujet est « xx »

Le « finally » j’irais plus avec « furthermore » puisque tu rajoutes ça en extra pour bien expliqué le pourquoi c’est important pour vous, et pourquoi ça devrait l’être pour la personne qui lis votre article.
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